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Hello this is an HMD for Helena from ataraxion. Please feel welcome to use the form below! Comments are neither screened nor anonymous.

If you feel the urgent need to use a sockpuppet for anonymity reasons, I find that sort of tragic and you can explain your rationale in your comment if you want. You should know that I am a fan of constructive criticism and often analyze my own work closely. In fact, let's start off with that--

Problems that I always anticipate:

1. My voice as a player overwhelming that of the character, mostly in dialogue, sometimes also in narrative
   
2. Excessive verbosity which obfuscates my meaning, especially when I'm tired-- I tend to find my language becomes more elliptical as I circle around the approximate region of my meaning and eventually arrive sort of in the general locale? MY WISH IS TO BE CONCISE. See, you can even tell by this comment.
   
3. Shying away from characters' more controversial or conflictive characteristics (e.g., racism, rudeness) in the interest of cultivating longer threads/more extensive CR
   
4. Too many IC actions in 1 tag
   
5. Characterization inconsistency that seems to exceed reasonable human day-to-day inconsistency
   
6. Twinking DX
   
7. Dream things are really hard for me to write you'll probably see this soon enough, so it's on here for now.
   
8. Problematic representations of populations I am not part of i.e., to a significant extent, of course some extrapolation is going to happen.
   
9. Deviations from canon self-explanatory I imagine
   

Feedback on these points and anything else would be great! Thank you.

<b>I. What you do well/best do more of:</b> <b>II. What I do poorly/could do less of:</b> <b>III. And some striking but ambivalent things:</b> <b>IV. Anything else?</b>

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